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  • ArmaliArmali Member, Secret Squirrel Posts: 1,090 ✭✭✭✭✭ - Grand Achaean
    @Jiraishin
    What's general policy on using parenthesis in this sort of writing?

    For example:

    He had red hair, parted to the left, that was long and curly.
    vs.
    He had red hair (parted to the left) that was long and curly.
  • DupreDupre M.Member Posts: 263 ✭✭✭ - Distinguished
    edited February 2
    You absolutely do not use parentheses for adding a minor, closely related details. Parentheses are meant to break up the flow of a sentence and draw attention to an aside, comment, or explanation that isn't directly related to the content of that sentence

    He had red hair, parted to the left, that was long and curly.
    He had red hair (Sartan dyed it with the blood of His enemies) that was long and curly.
    He had red hair (does it smell like blood to you?) that was long and curly.

    IMO there are few instances where a description can use parentheses without sounding douchey or dumb
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  • JiraishinJiraishin trapped in a thawing block of iceMember Posts: 1,493 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    Armali said:
    @Jiraishin
    What's general policy on using parenthesis in this sort of writing?

    For example:

    He had red hair, parted to the left, that was long and curly.
    vs.
    He had red hair (parted to the left) that was long and curly.
    Don't use them.
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  • CaelanCaelan Member Posts: 1,392 @ - Epic Achaean
    edited February 3
    Dupre said:
    You absolutely do not use parentheses for adding a minor, closely related details. Parentheses are meant to break up (the flow of) a sentence and draw attention (to an aside), ((comment), or explanation) that isn't directly related to the content (of that sentence)
    Use them liberally is the only rule.  Go big or go home.

  • VenmaraVenmara Member Posts: 18 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    Pyori said:
    Pyori and Elisella are both xoran (formerly human). Amunet's a human (I think?), as is Keorin. Shirszae's an atavian. Jemisha's a troll... To be honest, lately I've seen a lot more non-sirens than sirens. Not just in Ashtan... Though it doesn't stop them having the figure of a siren >.>
    Keorin's an atavian too, I think it just does not get mentioned much... And I have a sneaky feeling I'm the Troll Kraetos spoke to.
    I have noticed there being not a great deal of Trolls, female or otherwise (I can name Jemisha and Morn for certain, but nobody beyond)

    But I agree with the point, it's just him. Especially given the number of Rajamalan and Atavian I see in Cyrene.
    UrokShirszae
  • KlendathuKlendathu Eye of the StormMember Posts: 3,149 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    ... is a siren and has ( . )( . ) ? @Caelan

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  • FinchyFinchy Member Posts: 74 ✭✭✭ - Distinguished
    edited February 4
    Venmara said:

    But I agree with the point, it's just him. Especially given the number of Rajamalan and Atavian I see in Cyrene.
    Hey I was Atavian entirely for land-tax evasion purposes, then I fell for the Humanity meme because I didn't think wings and rigging was a good combo. 
    EDIT: Seriously I hate walking in the wilderness now. 

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