Descriptions Wanted 1.0

Devran

Don't know why I'm posting. Ahh random!


He is a lizard-like xoran. Like something out of a fever dream does this creature come, springing forth from the void like a phantasm conjured up from nightmare, a foreshadowing of oncoming travesty. Talon, scale and fang are his most dominant features, each vying for attention against the sheer size of his form. Eight feet and more of rippling muscle are sheathed in iron-hard scales of cobalt hue, the breadth of his shoulders ensuring most creatures he encounters would be draped in shadow, forced to crane their necks for their gaze to reach his pinnacle. Reptilian features flexible enough to display common emotions are concealed almost constantly by the thundercloud of his expression - a tempest of a frown, the hurricane of his scowl. Enormous hands tipped with brutal talons and a nearly prehensile tail of approximately six feet in length conclude his appearance. Beast. Monster.

It's terrible, and I'm fine with that. 

Szanthax

Averi said:

Pretty much, I want her to come across as that one girl who you look at and are immediately like "Man, you must spend like 4 hours in the bathroom in the morning and 2 at night to look that perfect" except one that could like actually kick some butt.

Damn those be some long shits...

Tahquil

Yeah, it's terrible.

Devran

Tahquil said:

Yeah, it's terrible.

I was thinking I could spice it up. Add something like "He has piercing yellow eyes that seem to stare into your soul." Sounds good right?

Still, my favorite one of all time was this gem from Imperian:

He is a scaly kohdon and is a very tall Kohdon, his eyes being the color of fire. He is about 6'7 245 pounds and very muscular in his upper body and legs giving hum UnGodly speed. His scales resembling that of the forest being a dark green that make is firey eyes more apparent. His right shoulder has a scar from where he fell into the ocean and he was bittin by a shark. His hair being of a black color making it look almost not there. His teeth white and strong as his body could probably chomp anyone down.

Reisen

Here's mine. It's a bit unconventional, so I think it fits here.

She is a human. Disheveled, with robes a size too big for her and covered hood to hem in scorch 

marks, Reisen looks more like your average tramp than an actual alchemist. Most of her body shape is

concealed by her voluminous garments, but what can be seen of her is a sooty, pale, youthful face 

with a set of startling grey eyes peering out from it, surrounded by a incorrigibly tangled mop of 

neck-length platinum blonde hair. When not hidden within her too-long sleeves, her tiny hands and 

fingers are visibly stained with various chemical reagants and the occasional burn scar, and her 

fingernails are invariably chewed down to the base with weeks-old chips of electric blue paint 

somehow still clinging onto them. All in all, she most closely resembles a child who somehow managed

to get her hands on a secret cache of explosive materials, and judging by the almost constant 

darting and shifting of her stormy eyes, that may just very well be the case.

She is wearing:

   a lightweight suit of steel ring mail

   charcoal shaded boots

   a set of alchemical robes

Containers:

   a bag of stasis

Tahquil

I'd use a word other than tramp. Dishevelled orphan?

Anedhel

Or urchin, perhaps! 

Reisen

I'll just leave this here. (Not me!)

He is a powerful troll. Or at least that is how it usually would go... Standing barely above the 5,7 

feet mark, a height uncharacteristically lacking for her race, the astoundingly feminine curves and 

delicate features of this troll are bound to make people double check in disbelief. A golden, serene 

gaze swirls in the depths of her amber eyes, coquettishly obscured by the falling curtain of her 

sideways combed bangs of silver short hair, giving her semblance an alluring, womanly charm as her 

dark pouty lips, hued by the tonalities of obsidian, smile fondly while faintly showing but the mere 

tips of her pointy lower teeth, a reminder of her races heritage. Her skin is smooth and delicate, 

albeit peppered by small, grainy stone patterns at the top of her shoulders, cheeks and neck like 

little freckles, making her granite-like skin resemble such material all the more while sustaining 

the terseness of fine silk. Her hips are round and finely toned, perting on a rather eye-catching 

manner as she moves her long, suggestive legs while, much to your surprise, her enticing, thin neck 

falls down all the way to finally guide your eyes to her rather sizeable cleavage, showcasing her 

full, attractive bust proudly.

Dravite

Is that how sexalts look nowadays? I remember a time where Troll sexalts were tall and muscly, all Siren sexalts had curves that'd make a God blush, Satyr sexalts were a woman's horny (huehuehue, geddit?) dream, and humans were fallback if you didn't want to get especially freaky.

Now I'm confused by a sexalts' gender. (Is it a he that became a she? Did the player muck up on gender choosing? Is it a she-man? Will I be set on fire for not understanding this person's gender?) 

Achaea's sexaltism has gone a dark, dark road indeed...... #MakeMudsexGreatAgain

(( If that's not a sexalt, I'm sorry. I'm just being a penis on forums. Drav's been accused of being a sexalt because of my terrible describing in his former desc.... Then I changed it and now he's still being accused lolololol it's hilariously annoying. ))

Reisen

So I reincarnated! Yeah yeah no clothes in descriptions, put a sock in it, you're not my mom.

She is a stout dwarf covered head to toe in alchemical robes stained and scorched from countless 

hours of abuse. Short and stocky as a dwarf ought to be, she has a natural set of curves tempered 

with defined musculature, though it's difficult to see beneath her thick garments. Her pale skin is 

lightly freckled, a dash of them crossing her face from cheek to cheek. Incorrigibly frizzled and 

wavy chestnut hair drapes down to the small of her back; two thick braids hang over her modest bosom,

adorned with tarnished gold rings near the ends. Her fringe is brushed back away from her strikingly 

vibrant silver eyes, framing them with the occasional stray lock that she can never seem to get rid 

of. A closely-trimmed chinstrap beard defines her jawline, the chin hairs terminating in a point; it 

looks like the only thing about her that she regularly maintains. When not obscured by her almost 

too-long sleeves, her hands are visibly marred with chemical stains and the occasional burn scar, 

and her fingernails look to be habitually chewed rather than filed -- perhaps not the best habit for 

someone of her profession.

Omor

Mmm bearded dwarf ladies

Bann

This is mine. Not sure I like it, but not sure why I feel that way.

He is a horned satyr. His upper body is moderately tanned and is leanly muscled, strong without 

being overly bulky and limiting his flexibility. His arms are likewise muscled and end in expressive,

 dexterous fingers which are calloused from use of the blade. His lower body is covered in a thick 

fur that is the same blue-black of his shoulder-length hair. The cloven hooves that end his legs are 

a matte black and large enough to provide an even, steady footing. Two pristine, white horns grow up 

from his forehead, sweeping back with graceful curves. Small, goat-like ears complete this Satyr and 

sweep back from the side of his head until something catches his attention. His face is moderately 

handsome by normal standards, though his eyes are the blue of a pure, bright sapphire.

Adeleine

Sorry, I'm dumb and posted in the wrong thread, ignore this post.

Adeleine

Found this description on a newbie. Someone's a Twilight fan?

She is a winged atavian. Her wings lack feathers, more resembling those of a bat. Her black hair and 

red eyes pierce your soul. Her rather lively curves and supple breast make her seem more akin to a 

siren, but her wings prove she is ataiven. Her dark tan skin ripples with life. Her mouth houses two 

fangs, making her seem like a vampire.

Adeleine

Also this one. I bolded the important parts.

She is a beautiful siren with the looks of an angel and a  body of a vixen. She has a face that 

could launch a thousand ships, the kind of raw and untamed beauty that only artists dream of 

sculpting once in a lifetime. Gazing at her face, the first thing that you notice is her smouldering 

bedroom eyes, barely containing the flames of desire within. Breathtakingly  gorgeous from top to 

bottom, her Sireni  physique is feminine to the extreme, with a figure so  ravishing that it is 

nothing short of being sinful. Her long suggestive neck sensually displays the overall silky 

smoothness of her  peaches and cream skin,  while her delicate shoulders and tempting collarbones 

define  the natural curves that lead down to show off her god given assets.Her long  silky mahognay 

tresses with burgandy highlights drape seductively down her chest  unbound, save two thick 

elaborately woven plaits at the temple, as they  draw attention to  the most prominent feature of 

her body which is her eye popping, jaw dropping, massively huge and supple breasts. Her body 

gracefully curves into  a petite waist, accenting her hourglass shape  before  widening out  to 

deeply curved hips. Descending lower, you capture a glance at her deliciously plump yet perfectly  

formed  derriere, connected to long smooth legs , striking a tantalizing pose. A  dark-colored 

beauty mark resting above the right side of her cheek draws attention to her second most prominent 

feature,  which is her plush, large bow shaped ruby red lips. She walks like a model, effortless and 

smooth,  exuding a seductive , feral energy which radiates throughout the area with every move she 

makes. Any clothing  draping around her body scarcely covers her deliciously  decadent form. Shadows 

and hints of her nudity beneath are revealed with every shift of the thin fabric  and tests the 

resolve of any clothing or top she decides to wear.

Armali

You know, amongs all of that, the thing that bothered me the most was the extra space in between 'deliciously' and 'decadent'. Like that was literally the first thing my eyes went to, and I just couldn't take them off of it, not even for the massively huge boobs.

Krypton

i r winged ataiven.

Adeleine

Armali said:

You know, amongs all of that, the thing that bothered me the most was the extra space in between 'deliciously' and 'decadent'. Like that was literally the first thing my eyes went to, and I just couldn't take them off of it, not even for the massively huge boobs.

There's double spaces everywhere in that description!

Bann

Crap, that desc's nipple poked me in the eye!!

Antonius

The thread is for posting your own description because you want it critiqued for improvement, not for posting descriptions of other people and going "Look at this and make fun of it with me."

Adeleine

OP says "anyone seen anything/anyone new and/or interesting?" so I take it to mean we can post descriptions we find interesting. Nobody's making fun of anybody, dude.

Frederich

He is a stout dwarf with short, somewhat shaggy, black hair atop his head, he stands at roughly 3'9". The sides and back of his hair have been shaved short, to leave a mohawk of sorts starting just past his ears. He has few scars to his body, though he seems more than a little eager for whatever the world has to offer. Slightly thick brow covered in the same black hairs as above lay above brown eyes that hold the glint of adventure to them as he looks about at everything he can get his eyes on. Coming down from that is a somewhat larger than normal nose seated right above a full, albeit trimmed, beard. His lips hidden somewhere in there as he grins wide at almost all times. His frame is short, yet stocky. Well trained muscles covered by a healthy layer of fat from his meat heavy diet. Hair is adorning most of his body that is visible, from just above his thick calloused hands and likely further beyond where his clothes cover. His legs are as thickly muscled, if not more so than the rest of his body, and just as hairy. Despite all of this, he seems ready to tackle the world.

Also, forgive the double spaces if there are any.

Adeleine

This one's mine, by the way.

She is a winged atavian. Adeleine's Arcadian heritage is evident in her iridescent gray wings and the vivid blue-green hue of her eyes. She is statuesque, with a well-sculpted, athletic build, always holding herself with a measure of pride. Pale, but not unpleasantly so, her skin bears only a few blemishes: a freckle here, a recently-healed cut there. Her dark hair falls just past her shoulders in layered, feathery waves. She keeps it tied into a loose ponytail at the top of her neck with a short blue ribbon, and a simple silver hairclip clears her fringe away from her face. 

I'm thinking of changing 'athletic build' to something else; everyone and their dog has an athletic build. Any ideas on how to improve that line?

Sandriel

Adeleine said:

This one's mine, by the way.

She is a winged atavian. Adeleine's Arcadian heritage is evident in her iridescent gray wings and the vivid blue-green hue of her eyes. She is statuesque, with a well-sculpted, athletic build, always holding herself with a measure of pride. Pale, but not unpleasantly so, her skin bears only a few blemishes: a freckle here, a recently-healed cut there. Her dark hair falls just past her shoulders in layered, feathery waves. She keeps it tied into a loose ponytail at the top of her neck with a short blue ribbon, and a simple silver hairclip clears her fringe away from her face. 

I'm thinking of changing 'athletic build' to something else; everyone and their dog has an athletic build. Any ideas on how to improve that line?

I think statuesque covers the other two. When you think grand sculpture from bygone eras, they're always athletic and sculpted so going on to state the same is a little redundant in my opinion. If you want to stick with it, you could always go with robust.

Aerek

Adeleine said:

This one's mine, by the way.

She is a winged atavian. Adeleine's Arcadian heritage is evident in her iridescent gray wings and the vivid blue-green hue of her eyes. She is statuesque, with a well-sculpted, athletic build, always holding herself with a measure of pride. Pale, but not unpleasantly so, her skin bears only a few blemishes: a freckle here, a recently-healed cut there. Her dark hair falls just past her shoulders in layered, feathery waves. She keeps it tied into a loose ponytail at the top of her neck with a short blue ribbon, and a simple silver hairclip clears her fringe away from her face. 

I'm thinking of changing 'athletic build' to something else; everyone and their dog has an athletic build. Any ideas on how to improve that line?

"...She carries herself with a soldier's build/frame and an air of discipline and pride, pale skin blemished by the odd freckle and the nicks and scrapes of her trade..."

Nicola

@Aerek that doesn't quite work. Rather: She carries her soldier's frame/build with an air of discipline and pride.

Adeleine

Aerek said:

Adeleine said:

This one's mine, by the way.

She is a winged atavian. Adeleine's Arcadian heritage is evident in her iridescent gray wings and the vivid blue-green hue of her eyes. She is statuesque, with a well-sculpted, athletic build, always holding herself with a measure of pride. Pale, but not unpleasantly so, her skin bears only a few blemishes: a freckle here, a recently-healed cut there. Her dark hair falls just past her shoulders in layered, feathery waves. She keeps it tied into a loose ponytail at the top of her neck with a short blue ribbon, and a simple silver hairclip clears her fringe away from her face. 

I'm thinking of changing 'athletic build' to something else; everyone and their dog has an athletic build. Any ideas on how to improve that line?

"...She carries herself with a soldier's build/frame and an air of discipline and pride, pale skin blemished by the odd freckle and the nicks and scrapes of her trade..."

Nicola said:

@Aerek that doesn't quite work. Rather: She carries her soldier's frame/build with an air of discipline and pride.

 
I might just do this.

Adeleine

How's this?

Adeleine's Arcadian heritage is evident in her iridescent gray wings and the vivid blue-green hue of her eyes. She carries herself with a statuesque soldier's build and an air of discipline and pride, pale skin blemished by the odd freckle and the nicks and scrapes of her trade. Her dark hair falls just past her shoulders in layered, feathery waves. She keeps it tied into a loose ponytail at the top of her neck with a short blue ribbon, and a simple silver hairclip clears her fringe away from her face. 

Adeleine

He is a winged atavian. A deeply unique specimen of his race, he is somehow a direct mix of atavian 

and rajamalan features; almost as if something of a humanoid tengu, if such a thing were possible. 

Standing around five feet in height when directly upright, his body is diminutive and slight, though 

exactly how much so is somewhat obscured by the fluffy coat of midnight-black fur that covers most 

of his visible body. His face is no exception, with thick tufts of cobalt blue-tipped fur puffing 

outwards from his cheekbones, and another almost beard-like tuft sits below his chin, while a 

lighter layer overlays the rest. His lips and the pad of his feline nose are glistening black, but 

his slit-irised eyes are a brilliant green that appears to glow eerily in reflected light. The top 

of his head shows a layer of sleek fur that progresses to a shaggy mane around his neck, with a pair 

of expressive, pointed ears jutting out through, clearly the only set he bears. Upon his back sit 

powerful shadowy wings streaked with veins of shiny cobalt blue feathers; large for the rest of his 

relatively small frame, and proving his atavian physiology. His hands, too, are furred on their 

backs but bear smooth skin upon their fingers and palms. Below the wings, however, emerges a long 

tail covered in a thick layer of blue fur striped with black.

Ahmet

Adeleine said:

with a pair of expressive, pointed ears jutting out through, clearly the only set he bears.

Because that needed clarification.