I did a search and noticed there was a thread on the old forums, but not this one. Just curious for review of mine.
He is a frog-like grook. He is a short creature with a scar beveled across his face, starting from his bald forehead to
the bottom of his thin upper lip. His face appears too relaxed on his left side, with the skin under his eye and his
bottom lip on that side drooping farther than his right. His eyes are large and jet black. He has a limp on his left
side, but is not that pronounced yet still noticeable. The index finger on his left hand is missing, with discolored flesh
surrounding the stump where it once was. His clothing appears clean and orderly.
I like characters with flaws. I also followed a rule of writing where I don't tell you what to feel. I would like him to appear physically damaged but not unkempt.
Also have (just found accent/voice ability): Your current Voice is: winded, raspy.
This would make it sound like I may be damaged physically inside my body too, instead of just the outside.
Part of this being ironed out is I can have an image of the persona of my character instead of just me Being John Malkovich, and be more comfortable in the character instead of sorta in a "oh my gosh, what do I say that doesn't sound lame... jeez you're taking too long to say something... what you just said was not impressive and boring, maybe next time" manner I have now.
I'm not asking for anyone to do this for me or anything, but tips/suggestions/advice/what-have-yous would be welcome.