What have you designed today?

Aralaya · November 2017

Imperial measurements suck!

Base 10 > Base Fuckyou

Jadys · November 2017

Hi everyone. Got a tailoring permit thinking I'd give it a try. My first design has been returned twice now, and I could use some help interpreting the rejection. The line in question is:

Sophistication at its best, this breathtaking gown features a strapless, sweetheart neckline and form fit, closely following the curves of the body from the bared arms and shoulders to the tops of the thighs before releasing into a cascade of shimmering intensity.

The rejection is that "a cascade of shimmering intensity" is subjective and inappropriate. The original was "a cascade of shimmering ecstasy." I am trying to describe the degree of the shimmer. It's not a subtle shimmer, so I am trying to describe it as a frenzied, intense, ecstatic, brilliant, fervent, whatever shimmer.

Any help is appreciated. Thanks.

Krypton · November 2017

an intensely shimmering cascade
a cascade of intensely bright shimmers
cascading in vibrant shimmers

dazzling shimmers
vividly shimmering

I think the main problem is that "intensity" and "ecstasy" suggest, in part, an opinion of the viewer, which is not allowed in designs.

Sena · November 2017

The problem I see is that "shimmering ecstasy/intensity" is very different from "intense/ecstatic shimmering". The former sounds pretty figurative and subjective, and I would never have guessed that the latter was the intended meaning.

Shayde · November 2017

You will also need to mention the light source which will cause it to shimmer. 'Blah blah can't shimmer in the dark'

Jadys · November 2017

Thank you everyone!

Solnir · December 2017

Submitted, approved, completed.

Appearance: an immense, rugged shield of earth and stone

Dropped: A pile of disturbed earth and stone in the shape of a shield lies here.

Examined: Large chunks of stone bound by earth make up this colossal shield, with strips of dragonleather within to wield it. The outer stones are engraved with runic symbols, producing a faint heat and a pulsing vermilion glow.

Appearance: an imposing scythe of sharpened stone and earth

Dropped: A large earthen scythe is here, melding into the ground.

Examined: The long earthen handle of this scythe is wrapped tightly with dragonleather to provide ease of gripping, while the heft of the weapon is in its blade. Sharpened to a razor's edge, the blade is a solid piece of curved stone, runic symbols engraved along it that pulse with a faint heat and vermilion glow.

I know they aren't perfect, but I'm super, super stoked they got approved.

[Deleted User] · December 2017

All approved (crit pendant)

an anatomical heart and soulspear charm pendant

Luminous silver, rendered into a fifteen-inch long chain, gleams like a polished corona, each linked loop delicate in its lustre, but undeniably sturdy in construction. Not even the throes of battle or daily wear will rive this pendant from its owner's throat. The chain coils sinuously around the neck, draped across the the protrusion of the wearer's collarbones, and suspends two sinister charms. Carved into an anatomically-correct humanoid heart, the left charm shimmers as if fresh blood still pumps through it. The effect caused by the faceted rubies studding its globular surface. The important parts of the organ are visible in miniature: the triple aortic tubes bulging from the top, both broad ventricles, and tiny snaking slivers of flowing obsidian marking veins and arteries. The right charm is radiant in its simple construction, an elongated spear of murky crystal with swirls of molten gold gleaming inside the milky gemstone. The tip of the soulspear menaces with deadly intent, honed to a vicious silver-plated point despite being a simple charm.

Klendathu · December 2017

@Syndra:

I'd join these two sentences with a comma, because the second seems incomplete:
Carved into an anatomically-correct humanoid heart, the left charm shimmers as if fresh blood still pumps through it. The effect caused by the faceted rubies studding its globular surface.

I would add a comma between 'point' and 'despite' in the last sentence.

The last three sentences all begin with 'The', you could join the last two into a single sentence with a little light editing.

Minifie · December 2017

With help from Krypton at the start and the final touches from Trey:

a slender scimitar of ink-black steel

A masterfully-crafted scimitar lies here, dark smoke wisping methodically

Crafted with a single purpose in mind, the gentle curve of this blade looks ready to part mail and flesh alike with effortless ease. Three feet of glossy black steel, its razor edge gleams evilly in any light, and trails curious tendrils of dark smoke, like smouldering brimstone. The hilt is carven snakewood in the stylised likeness of a sea serpent, its strong knucklebow guard of polished steel travelling from the base of the blade to the open mouth on the pommel. The wooden surface has been oiled with care, the dappled patterns giving the wood its name rippling in stark contrast like adder skin. Inlaid into the face of the guard, three perfect sapphires sparkle brilliantly, their vivid blueness almost glowing with their own luminescence. Etched near-invisibly into the throat of the blade is a minute smith's mark: crossed rapiers over a forge, the initials "T.A." to either side in flowing calligraphy.

Klendathu · December 2017

'has been' is the devil's work. Is. Not has been. Also, you're missing a space between 'and' and 'flesh' in the first sentence. 'the dappled patterns that give the wood its name'

Otherwise I like it

Minifie · December 2017

Klendathu said:

'has been' is the devil's work. Is. Not has been. Also, you're missing a space between 'and' and 'flesh' in the first sentence. 'the dappled patterns that give the wood its name'

Otherwise I like it

the space was from editing into the forum post, fortunately I didn't let -that- go through

Lhex · December 2017

I have some tailor designs I want to make for Lhex, but I want to have them looked over before I submit them (and get them non-decayed because I really like the look of them). Woot for ice figurines. Any suggestions and whatnot welcome! Spoilered because there are eight designs.

-- Jerkin (1 figurine)

Appearance: a sleeveless and hooded ebon leather jerkin

Dropped: A sleeveless jerkin lies here in a heap of ebon leather

Examined: Made of simple ebon leather, this unadorned jerkin is bereft of its sleeves in standard fashion. Small silver buttons hold the garment closed. A rather deep hood sits atop the cloak, the insides lined with an equally dark cloth. The tail of the jerkin reaches down to the wearer's knees, the leather splitting at the waist.

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-- Doublet (1 figurine)

Appearance: a simple, loose-fitting ivory doublet

Dropped: A simple doublet lies here in a heap of ivory cloth.

Examined: Made of simple white cloth, this unadorned doublet is rather airy and loose on the wearer. Thin white ropes allow the garment to be pulled closed and tied. While the upper arms of the sleeves remain light and loose, the forearms of the garment fit closely, almost tightly, to the wearer.

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-- Trousers (1 figurine)

Appearance: a pair of loose-fitting ebon trousers

Dropped: A pair of sturdy trousers lies here in a heap of ebon cloth.

Examined: Made of simple ebon cloth, this unadorned pair of trousers is rather airy and loose on the wearer. Lacking a buckle or drawstrings, the trousers bear loops designed specifically for thin belts. While the waist and thighs of the trousers remain light and loose, the calves of the garment fit closely, almost tightly, to the wearer.

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-- Boots (1 figurine)

Appearance: a pair of knee-high ebon leather traveling boots

Dropped: A pair of slightly dusty black leather traveling boots sit here.

Examined: Made of simple ebon leather, these traveling boots are thick and durable. Reaching to a little below the knee of the wearer, the boots bear multiple silver buckles meant to make the boots a snug and firm fit for the wearer. The soles are thick and heavy, ready for the wear and tear of adventure.

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-- Deck (2 figurines)

Appearance: an ebon leather tarot deck

Dropped: A slim ebon leather deck lies here in a heap of leather straps.

Examined: This black leather tarot deck is of simple design, lacking any decoration past a symbol of a grinning horned mask imprinted front and center. Two long leather straps and silver buckles are meant to be used to strap the deck to the wearer's thigh, where the wearer would be able to easily draw and use the cards held within.

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-- Belt (1 figurine)

Appearance: an ebon leather belt with a grinning mask buckle

Dropped: A simple leather belt lies here, the mask buckle shining dully.

Examined: Made of simple ebon leather, this thin belt lacks any decoration past its silver buckle. The silver has been shaped into a small horned mask, the mouth of it grinning broadly. Its eyes are similarly contorted in humour, and laugh lines give the mask some semblance of realism.

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-- Gloves (1 figurine)

Appearance: ebon leather forearm gloves

Dropped: Simple gloves lies here in a heap of ebon leather.

Examined: Made of simple ebon leather, these gloves are most notably long enough to cover the forearms of the wearer. The gloves leave the thumb, forefinger, and middle finger uncovered. Dark drawstrings lace the underside of the forearm gloves, meant to be pulled tight and tied off.

Taryius · December 2017

I had this finalized a week or two ago but I'm in love with it. Custom crit pendant.

APPEARANCE: a black steel daemonic skull pendant

DROPPED: Wrapped about a chain of tarnished silver, a daemonic skull pendant lies here.

EXAMINED: About the size of a closed fist, and cleanly severed from the spine of a lesser daemon, this wickedly horned imp skull hangs loosely upon a chain of tarnished silver. Dipped into molten steel until seamlessly coated in a thin layer, the metallic surfaces of this daemonic skull have been carefully charred and blackened. A blazing shard of primordial flame flickers from deep within the skull, casting an ominous red-hued light outwards from the eye sockets and tooth-filled maw.

WHEN WORN: As you don the daemonic pendant, the wicked flames within flare outwards from hollow sockets. Shifting to a vivid emerald hue, the flames threaten to break free from their confines, eventually calming and dimming back to their natural fiery-red.

WHEN TOUCHED: A shrieking cackle echoes through your mind as your grasp the daemonic skull in your hand. Your flesh sizzles and burns upon contact, the primordial flames within flickering and dancing.

Shout out to @Saeva for helping me clean up the design and reactions before submitting!

Krypton · December 2017

Missed one

A shrieking cackle echoes through your mind as your grasp the daemonic skull in your hand.

Antonius · December 2017

The dropped description doesn't make sense. How does a skull wrap about a chain? I assume you meant that the chain is wrapped about the skull, but you've said the opposite.

Ahmet · December 2017

You have an extra comma in the first sentence, too.

Armali · December 2017

Does it cost extra to redo typos?

Krypton · December 2017

I just TYPO designs.

Taryius · December 2017

Oh, alas, the many mistakes of a poor writer. Thank you guys for putting the scrutiny goggles on and finding what I missed, they should be remedied soon enough!

[Deleted User] · January 2018

Lots of fun things.

@Minifie

a dragon-shaped cuff earring

A hunk of fine silver, stained with a blackened antique patina, has been precisely carved into this bespoke earring. Mimicking a fierce dragon, only in miniature, its scaled, reptilian body curls sinuously around the helix in a tight-fitting grasp, with its claws acting as anchor points to flesh. The horned head and flaring snout looms over the tip of the ear and hovers menacingly against the upper cartilage. The appearance is beautifully life-like as if the dragon is a tiny guardian ready to snap at anyone who gets close. A pair of faceted sapphires glimmer with prismatic fire and throw off violent shades of blue with every flash of light. The dragon's wings fan down the slinky spine of the serpent as it moulds around the helix, jutting broadly from the midpoint of the back, and nestling against the wearer's hairline. Twisting down to the front of the lobe, the dragon's tail cruelly pierces the flesh, and emerges on the other side; its spaded tail nearly brushing the wearer's face. Despite the earring cuff's chunky appearance, it remains lightweight.

@Kiet

a dragon talon earring of unpolished gold

A nugget of golden ore has been refined, hammered, and etched into a prestigious accouterment. Despite the lustre of the alloy, the finish remains unpolished, revealing the unique flaws and pitted surface of the valuable metal, and becoming the asperous bedrock for this fierce-looking earring. Resembling a severed dragon claw, only in miniature, the creature's talons are the focal point of this accessory. Four talons are represented in exquisite, scaled detail, with the very tips honed to razor sharpness. The thumb-like gilded talon is the earring's anchor point, punching from the back of the ear, and savagely appearing on the other side. The other three talons hook beneath the lobe, carving upwards to tether against the bottom rim of the lobe, and viciously pinching flesh in its spiteful aureate fist.

@Aegoth

a pulsing holocaust globe earring

This bantam sized earring is three carats of unclouded crystal, surrounding a core of potent fire, and mounted upon a gleaming earring post. The small stud presents as a flaming ingot puncturing the earlobe, large enough to be visible, yet small enough to ensure that the details of the accessory are only visible upon close inspection. Close up, the effort gone into the earring's craftsmanship are revealed. Deep in the heart of the unfaceted globe, eddying fiery hues twist in a gyre of heat, a raging pyre straining and testing the limits of its crystalline cage as if destruction incarnate was captured within. The feverish colours pulse from the magic held at the core of the artefact, embattled gold streaking and churning with veins of crimson forking out to silver at the edges of the globe. The potential for ignition burns in the faux holocaust globe as if threatening to incinerate any and all caught within the miniature conflagration. Pulsing with light, the illumination flares across the ear, ranging from a ruddy glow to a brilliant aureate spark, and back again.

Xandir · January 2018

Got this approved a couple of weeks ago, but I thought I'd share here! Let me know what you guys think?

Appearance: an onyx bow inset with rubies
Dropped: A magnificent bow has been dropped here, shimmering brightly.
Examined: Crafted of a single vein of onyx, this bow runs an impressive five feet in length, the ends curved outward and capped in high grade silver. The face of the bow is broad and smooth with masterfully cut rubies set firmly in place within the very onyx. In the middle of the bow, a handle has been fashioned of thick leather, molded to provide a comfortable fit for the wielders hand. Sweeping back from the face of the bow, the rest of the onyx has been meticulously carved to resemble wings of great detail. Fashioned from a high grade of silver above the handle, an arrow rest resembles the beak of a large Saker falcon, open to issue a valiant war-cry. Protruding from the right side of the bow are two silver talons, spaced about a foot apart and positioned so as the talons can hold a few spare arrows. The unblemished surface of the bow and the gems inset catch and reflect each bit of light as it plays across the length of the weapon.

Kyrra · January 2018

I love the mental imagery of that bow. Trey's broken me for fantasy weapons though so I'm wondering how it functionally works as a bow when it's made from stone.

Nazihk · January 2018

Darkbows are made from obsidian and I've never understood how it works, but at least there's precedent here.

Xandir · January 2018

Kyrra said:

I love the mental imagery of that bow. Trey's broken me for fantasy weapons though so I'm wondering how it functionally works as a bow when it's made from stone.

Uh... idk, magic?

Minifie · January 2018

Xandir said:

Kyrra said:

I love the mental imagery of that bow. Trey's broken me for fantasy weapons though so I'm wondering how it functionally works as a bow when it's made from stone.

Uh... idk, magic?

you put the arrow in the quiver and throw that heavy mofo straight at a dude's head.

Make sure you envenom the string, that thing will get into someone's eye for that sweet paralysis.

Stheno · January 2018

Limited edition jackets for the first Mhaldorian Air Lords: @Krysanth, @Kiet, and @Zackery.

a fur-lined flight jacket of the tempest

Thick buffalo leather is used in the construction of this flight jacket, insulating it against all but the most cutting of winds. Dyed a deep crimson, then rubbed down and treated with a matt finish, it is the blood-red backdrop of a stylised storm that roils across the coat's back and shoulders. White canvas is carefully hand-cut and embossed in the shape of round, rolling clouds, their spirals and eddies emphasised by the contrast of sky-blue stitching and diamond dust. A tempest approaches from the left, and as it clashes with the right sleeve, it whirls a partial landscape of earth, sea, and flame into a flurry of coloured fabric in the firmament, suffused with the red of the surrounding mist. The square, high-necked collar is fringed with a lining of obsidian fur, which continues on the inside of the sleeves and cuffs, adding warmth throughout the piece. The practicality of the design is reinforced by additional hide at the shoulder pads and elbows, stitched in place with the same bold, prismatic thread.
Embroidered on it are the words:
Air or land, all will bow to the Lord's command.
It is substantial enough to cut the chill fairly well.
It bears the distinctive mark of Stheno.
It has been altered for added warmth.

Aralaya · January 2018

Can't believe I never actually posted these, they were designed months ago.

@Talamond and I, being the zealots we are, built shrines to the Bloodsworn in our subdivision house, because yes (rooms are called shrine to <bsworn>, shrines are the room descs)

I designed the Aurora shrine with some help from Talamond and some Aarashi. Talamond designed the Deucalion shrine on his own as far as I know

Aurora Shrine:

Dominating the centre of the room, a massive statue of Lady Aurora commands the full attention of all who enter. A gleaming scimitar is held aloft in Her right hand with battle-ready poise, an ethereal, pulsing light emanating from its pommel of perfect Eudialyte. Resting on Her opposite side, the blade's twin lies secured in an ornate ivory scabbard decorated in gold filigree. Gripped in Her left hand is a brilliant prism, scattering the light from the scimitar to form a radiant display below. A triad of statuettes encircle the base, the Dragon, Eagle, and Phoenix conveying the Lightbringer's ferocity, compassion, and championing of Life and Rebirth. A raised basin filled with water stands at the forefront, attached to a prominent plaque carved with the words, "These are the facets of Life, which fill the whole of Creation."

Deucalion Shrine:

Intimidating flickers of brilliant orange cascade across the walls, originating from a towering statue of Lord Deucalion. An authoritarian stance and stern visage convey the Righteous Fire's uncompromising demeanor, punctuated by featureless eyes of solid gold directed at the unseen distance. His left hand maintains a firm grip on a luminous ivory shield while His right extends commandingly forward, presenting a roaring fire atop an open palm. Scores of charred iron braziers stand at varying heights, their quivering flames flaring and conjoining to conceal the majority of the torso and waist. Precariously close to the scorching display is a raised pyre, joined by a plaque engraved with, "In the Flame are all things made pure."

Nyneve · January 2018

I redid my scims some time ago. The matt/matte was irritating on the black scimitar, so I thought I might as well redo both!

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an ebony, serpent's fang scimitar

Viewed in profile, the arc of the scimitar mimics that of a serpent's fang. Sleek and glossy from a coating of venom, the blackened mithril blade radiates with an aura of deadly efficiency. Carved from metallic sandstone of dark crimson and copper hues, the hilt is formed into a nest of serpents, the lithe bodies winding and slithering together along the grip. On either side of the pommel is the unblinking eye of Sol Invictus, each iris carved from a single diamond, the facets reflecting light from the darkness. Runes etched along the fuller glow white with earthly power, among them symbols depicting a couchant lion, and three golden suns.

(Couchant lion for my time as Lion of Arkios, and Triple Suns as a nod to the Dawnstriders)

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a radiant, angel's wing scimitar

Carved from pure white ivory, an angelic figure serves as the hilt of this radiant scimitar, her hands clasped in prayer and eyes glowing in righteous fury. Viewed in profile, the shining mithril blade is expertly forged into wings that emerge from the angel's shoulders, and gracefully arc together into a single, deadly edge. Upon the pommel on both sides is a brilliant sunburst, the hues shifting from brilliant yellow to rustic red on the outer edges. Runes etched along the fuller glow white with earthly power, among them symbols depicting two swords in saltire, and a faceted jewel.

(Two swords in saltire for the Templars, faceted jewel for Shallam)
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My lyre, heavily influenced by @Milabar's Mitran gear

Sol's Grace, a lyre of Hesperian sandstone

Crafted from Hesperian sandstone, the rich hues of terra cotta, gold, blush pink, and umber swirl into each other in a beautiful imitation of a sunset. A large garnet sunburst adorns one side of the instrument with a golden eight-pointed star centered upon it. Gleaming strings of mithril are pulled taut across the sounding chamber and the crossbar, expertly tuned to produce clear, vibrant notes when strummed. A rich brown leather strap is wrapped around one of the arms, allowing the musician to secure the lyre at the hip.

Jurixe · January 2018

I was looking for something today and found a tapestry I designed for the tapestry contest. It didn't win (great job @Stheno!) so I may as well share it.

a devastating tapestry of the Worldreaver

Hung upon a nearby wall, an enormous tapestry depicts the grim legacy of the Worldreaver.

Brightly coloured weft threads weave seamlessly together to tell the story of Bal'met, the Worldreaver in tapestry form. Starting small, the ormyrr rape of Elara is the first of a chain of events that wind serpentine across the fabric, depicting the alien God's rise. Towards the middle, the eye is drawn to vivid battle scenes of a formless black miasma astride a great undead dragon, Gods lying dead in His wake; followed by vengeful Lady Keresis forcing Bal'met into a portal to the bleak Nishnatoba wastelands. Larger images continue of Lady Maya sacrificing Her Divinity, Demigods fighting shades on Nishnatoba and finally, a last, stark portrayal of Aurora, the Lightbringer thrusting Her holy sword into Bal'met's dark heart, ending His reign of terror. In the bottom corner, a robed grey figure is half-turned away from the carnage, His hands cupped around a dancing flame.

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