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Nivm
I've noticed that utterly horrible pieces of art are inflicted minimum destructive criticism here. So I decided to put up a random work in the hopes of entertaining someone.



This is what I imagined when I read:
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A runic totem is planted solidly in the ground. A small ward hangs here, the bones clattering against one another quietly in the breeze.

And lightly skimmed:
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Expertly formed from carefully carved wood and thick leather, this runic totem protrudes almost five feet from the ground, although it is not particularly think in diameter. Largely unadorned, its smooth surface is interrupted only by the delicate silver inlay that defines spaces for six runes.

A rune like an open eye is sketched in slot 1.
A rune resembling a bell is sketched in slot 2.
A rune that looks like a nail is sketched in slot 3.
A rune that looks like a nail is sketched in slot 4.
A rune that looks like a nail is sketched in slot 5.
A rune that looks like something out of your nightmares is sketched in slot 6.
It is tuned against enemies of the City of Ashtan.
It is tuned for members of the City of Ashtan.
It weighs about 30 pounds.
It bears the distinctive mark of Liraniel.
You may use this item to parry with.
This totem is the property of The City of Ashtan.


The totem feels like a very normal thing, like a public mail box or phone booth in the city streets of our world, but with an important and protective purpose.

Notes:
I cannot draw living things with any clarity, most people I draw look like someone withered all of their limbs and gave them a number of horrible diseases. I cannot work efficiently with color. There will be smudges because I do not have a steady hand, and need to ground it somewhere. I did not realize I was using lined paper till a quarter of the way through, and realized it would matter half way through. I did need to erase and adjust lines. There are no shadows, for I did not plan for them when I started.
Since the last rune was describing "your" nightmares specifically, I assumed it to be different for every person and every instance. So I just drew stereotypical things that if enlarged and placed near you would be frightening.
Because the totem apparently works no matter which direction a person comes from, I thought the totem had enough sides to display the runes clearly in all directions. A heptagon seemed appropriate.
I haven't read anything detailing it, but I assumed the bones came from the children at the de Vermiis Orphanage. When I read that it hangs, I assumed that it had it's own stand to hang from, as one cannot guarantee that there will be something to hang it from in every room.
Synbios
The drawing feels a bit flat. Perspective on the cobblestone road could use a little work. Without a reference figure, the totem looks massive. I'd like to point out that, unimplanted, Runelorists also have the ability to prop up their own totems to surprise enemies approaching their room. So I'm guessing around a totem would be at most six inches thick.

Nice work, though. Recommending bond paper for your next work, though.
Sena
Yeah, totems are much narrower than that, too narrow to stand on their own, at least. Six inches in diameter even sounds a bit bigger than I picture them, I'd say about 3 inches.

Also, the bone wards are composed of three slender finger bones hanging from three differently coloured strips of leather, with the leather attached to an iron hook. It doesn't specify what the hook is attached to, it could be the side of a wall or building, or a hook on the end of an iron pole in the ground.
katia
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Expertly formed from carefully carved wood and thick leather, this runic totem
protrudes almost five feet from the ground, although it is not particularly
thick in diameter. Largely unadorned, its smooth surface is interrupted only by
the delicate silver inlay that defines spaces for six runes.



no, they're pretty massive
Sena
QUOTE (katia @ Jul 21 2009, 11:29 AM) *
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Expertly formed from carefully carved wood and thick leather, this runic totem
protrudes almost five feet from the ground, although it is not particularly
thick in diameter. Largely unadorned, its smooth surface is interrupted only by
the delicate silver inlay that defines spaces for six runes.



no, they're pretty massive

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Using all the arts of runelore, you carve the wood with naturalistic depictions, bind them together with the leather comms, and with a bit of earth magic, blend the silver commodities into the construction, which transforms before your eyes into a long, narrow totem pole.

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Expertly formed from carefully carved wood and thick leather, this runic totem stands at almost five feet high, although it is not particularly thick in diameter. Largely unadorned, its smooth surface is interrupted only by the delicate silver inlay that defines spaces for six runes.

And if it was as wide as the picture depicts it, it would stand on it's own, there wouldn't be any need to strain to stand it. If it was half that wide, it would still be able to stand on it's own on even ground.
Saadya
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Using all the arts of runelore, you carve the wood with naturalistic depictions, bind them together with the leather comms, and with a bit of earth magic, blend the silver commodities into the construction, which transforms before your eyes into a long, narrow totem pole.


How ugly. Why not 'strips of leather' and 'silver bars'.
Sena
QUOTE (Saadya @ Jul 21 2009, 11:59 AM) *
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Using all the arts of runelore, you carve the wood with naturalistic depictions, bind them together with the leather comms, and with a bit of earth magic, blend the silver commodities into the construction, which transforms before your eyes into a long, narrow totem pole.


How ugly. Why not 'strips of leather' and 'silver bars'.

Agreed.

Also, I thought the weight was a bit off, so I did some Google searching to try and estimate the weight of a solid oak pole. The totems are about 30 pounds, which would be about right for 1 cubic foot. If the totem is 5 feet tall and 6 inches thick, it would be about 5 cubic feet. For the totem to be 1 cubic foot, it would need to be less than 3 inches. That doesn't take into account the leather/silver, but both should be heavier than the wood.
Dusty
Saadya
That is one fat obelisk.
Nivm
Thus why I noted "flawed" in the title. I do know what both objects should be now, after I drew it and went back to play the game. I randomly draw things on spare paper sometimes. I was thinking of something 5 feet tall where all symbols are immediately seen by everyone coming near and can stand on its own in a strong gust of wind or slanted hail after simply being dropped there. I know earth magic is what stands it up now, and it has to be wield-able too. For perspective on the matter, I guess the only valid thing would be the size of bricks in the wall and the footprints in the dirt. However, when drawing it, I thought the bricks would be a good measure.

I didn't notice I'd forgotten to make the cobblestones smaller the farther away they are. I'll add it to the mistake list.
Morwen
QUOTE (Dusty @ Jul 21 2009, 04:08 PM) *


oooooooo...threedee!
Mysterion
I liked the WoW-esque priestly demons on the bottom rune... ph34r.gif
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