[Spudd]

look spudd

He is a tiger-like Rajamala and is approximately six feet in height. This
creature's lithe, muscular form - the result of long hours in the Gymkhana - is
thickly covered from head to toe in a fur of rich chestnut and copper hues as
vibrant as the Savannah grasses. Narrow bands of darker fur trail from the base
of his neck, down his back and up his tail, culminating to form a dark mahogany
tip. The tail itself nearly matches Spudd in height, and is quite dexterous
despite its thickness, meaning it could be employed in lieu of an encumbered
limb. Though often dragged along behind him, it is just as easily reared in the
air, twitching. Upon each of his four paws are several sharp claws perfect for
hunting that Spudd idly uses to pick ivory-coloured fangs which barely protrude
past his black lips. A wet, sable nose juts out subtly from the fur on his face
as one of the few hairless parts of his body. Above, two deep emerald eyes with
narrow pupils glint in the light while below, a thin shadowy line belies his
large mouth, which houses his knife-sharp teeth and sandpaper textured tongue.
Three thin whiskers protrude from either side of his mouth, craftily allowing
him to detect vibrations in the air. Atop of his head are two triangular ears
which twitch ever so slightly in response to any sound, and a large chunk has
been taken from the left, a remnant of an old battle.
He is wearing:
a simple silver hoop through his right ear,
spunky Rajamala socks,
a silk tekura black belt,
sleek black, fingerless tekura gloves,
streamlined white ankle wrapped tekura shoes,
a silky black, red dragon tekura ribbon,
a red linen tekura gi shirt,
a pair of loose-fitting red tekura trousers, and
wings of elemental Air

[Ilial]

On the contrary, it's quite the over-hyphenation nightmare!

You may be right! I do like my hyphens...

Yeah, I just noticed there are a LOT of hyphens in your description. Somehow I don't notice such things in game.

[Jethreiven]

He is a tiger-like Rajamala and is approximately six feet in height. This
creature's lithe, muscular form - the result of long hours in the Gymkhana - is
thickly covered from head to toe in a fur of rich chestnut and copper hues as
vibrant as the Savannah grasses. Narrow bands of darker fur trail from the base
of his neck, down his back and up his tail, culminating to form a dark mahogany
tip. The tail itself nearly matches Spudd in height, and is quite dexterous
despite its thickness, meaning it could be employed in lieu of an encumbered
limb. Though often dragged along behind him, it is just as easily reared in the
air, twitching. Upon each of his four paws are several sharp claws perfect for
hunting that Spudd idly uses to pick ivory-coloured fangs which barely protrude
past his black lips. A wet, sable nose juts out subtly from the fur on his face
as one of the few hairless parts of his body. Above, two deep emerald eyes with
narrow pupils glint in the light while below, a thin shadowy line belies his
large mouth, which houses his knife-sharp teeth and sandpaper textured tongue.
Three thin whiskers protrude from either side of his mouth, craftily allowing
him to detect vibrations in the air. Atop of his head are two triangular ears
which twitch ever so slightly in response to any sound, and a large chunk has
been taken from the left, a remnant of an old battle.

Nice description, I like it. But one minor issue: what happens when you actually break a leg IG? I'm pretty sure you won't be able to actually use your tail.

[Iocun]

He could get a cane of the quickening and customise it to be "my tail that looks like a cane".

[Spudd]

He is a tiger-like Rajamala and is approximately six feet in height. This
creature's lithe, muscular form - the result of long hours in the Gymkhana - is
thickly covered from head to toe in a fur of rich chestnut and copper hues as
vibrant as the Savannah grasses. Narrow bands of darker fur trail from the base
of his neck, down his back and up his tail, culminating to form a dark mahogany
tip. The tail itself nearly matches Spudd in height, and is quite dexterous
despite its thickness, meaning it could be employed in lieu of an encumbered
limb. Though often dragged along behind him, it is just as easily reared in the
air, twitching. Upon each of his four paws are several sharp claws perfect for
hunting that Spudd idly uses to pick ivory-coloured fangs which barely protrude
past his black lips. A wet, sable nose juts out subtly from the fur on his face
as one of the few hairless parts of his body. Above, two deep emerald eyes with
narrow pupils glint in the light while below, a thin shadowy line belies his
large mouth, which houses his knife-sharp teeth and sandpaper textured tongue.
Three thin whiskers protrude from either side of his mouth, craftily allowing
him to detect vibrations in the air. Atop of his head are two triangular ears
which twitch ever so slightly in response to any sound, and a large chunk has
been taken from the left, a remnant of an old battle.

Nice description, I like it. But one minor issue: what happens when you actually break a leg IG? I'm pretty sure you won't be able to actually use your tail.

Right, but it LOOKS like it could. Thats how dexterous it is

[Sena]

She is a tiger-like Rajamala and is small and lithe, causing her long tail to seem a bit out of place, being the same length as the rest of her body. You can clearly see that the rigors of combat have taken their toll on her body, her skin hardened and slightly muscular, and her face shows the first signs of old age. She is covered in soft, white fur, with bands of darker colored fur in a few places as well, the most clearly defined being a band of black fur around her neck. A few streaks of grey fur run through her tail, which fades into a soft, rusty color near the tip. Her eyes are a pale silver, and seem to reflect the color of her surroundings. Her hair, similar in color to her eyes, with streaks of darker grey, is pulled back in a tight braid, reaching down to the middle of her back. Barely visible in their retracted state, the tips of her claws glint dangerously, apparently dyed bright silver. You can see several runes scattered over her body, stained in her fur with blue ink. She grips a massive halberd tightly in her hands, the weapon looking to be at least two feet taller than she is.

There's Sena. I changed her description to look less cuddly, but it sounds a bit off, and doesn't really flow well. Any advice on improving the wording of it?

Also, the description changes depending on whether or not she's wielding her halberd, and whether her claws are extended or retracted, as well as a couple other things.

[Viera]

Not able to look at it closer, but what happens when Sena has broken arms and possibly unwields her halberd, or uses a doll, or uses a totem? (Assuming my memory is correct and Sena's a shaman.)

[Sena]

As I said, the description changes when she's not wielding her halberd. And yes, she's a shaman.

[Viera]

As I said, the description changes when she's not wielding her halberd. And yes, she's a shaman.

Like I said, skimmed it over. Sorry and thanks for letting me know.

[Spudd]

How about this, Sena?

She is a tiger-like Rajamala and is small and lithe, drawing attention to her tail which is as nearly as tall as she. The rigors of combat have manifested themselves upon Sena's form, and her skin has become hardened, her muscles more evident, and her face shows the first signs of old age. Covered in a soft, white fur, several bands of a darker gradient ring her body here and there, the most clearly defined being a band of black fur around her neck. Streaks of grey run lightly along the length of her swishing tail, which fade to a rusty hue at the tip. Her eyes are a pale silver, and seem to reflect the color of her surroundings, while her hair - similar in color to her eyes, with streaks of darker grey - is pulled back in a tight braid, reaching down to the middle of her back. Barely visible in their retracted state, the tips of her silver-dyed claws glint dangerously as a warning to any who may wish to confront her, and several archaic runes have been etched upon her body, staining the fur with blue ink. Oh, and she is a kawaii furrie

[Sindri]

As you glance down, you notice that his right hand is missing the smallest finger.

I was sure this was going to read 'As you glance down, you notice his right hand in your pocket'

[Antonius]

As you glance down, you notice that his right hand is missing the smallest finger.

I was sure this was going to read 'As you glance down, you notice his right hand in your pocket'

He'd be an awful thief if he was that easy to catch.

[Sindri]

He'd be an awful thief if he was that easy to catch.

Seeing and catching are two different things, he's a slippery little sucker!

[Jhaeli]

She is a tiger-like Rajamala and is small and lithe, causing her long tail to seem a bit out of place, being the same length as the rest of her body. You can clearly see that the rigors of combat have taken their toll on her body, with a toned, hardened body her skin hardened and slightly muscular, and a worn face showing her face shows the first signs of old age. She is covered in soft, white fur, with accented by dark bands of darker colored fur in a few places as well, the most clearly defined being a band of black fur around her neck. A few streaks of grey fur run through her tail, which fades into a soft, rusty color near the tip. Her eyes are a pale silver, and seem to reflect the color of her surroundings. Her hair matches her feline eyes in colour, with additional , similar in color to her eyes, with streaks of darker grey, and is pulled back in a tight braid, that reaches reaching down to the middle of her back. Barely visible in their retracted state, the tips of her claws glint dangerously, apparently dyed bright silver. You can see several runes scattered over her body, stained in her fur with blue ink. She grips a massive halberd tightly in her hands, the weapon looking to be at least two feet taller than she is.

Overall, I thought it was pretty good. I went through it to make some suggestions of my own, which you can take or not.

Bold is where I added to the description or reworded it, while I struck out what should be removed. Italics is where I wasn't sure or it wasn't necessarily bad, but I thought it could be reworded. From the looks of it, you've got the same kind of tendancy that I do; to add a bit of hesitation by using words like "seem" and "slightly". I've always been told to try and fix it by making it a little more forceful or bolder by shortening it up or using different words. For example, I changed "slightly muscular" to be "toned" in the second line. You could probably play around with some of the others if you so choose.

With the halberd line, just wanted to mention that most feel this is unnecessary, as we can see in the room desc that you're carrying a halberd, and if they're looking at your description, can probably guess that it's much much taller than you. Just a thought!

To make it easier, with the changes I mentioned, this is how it would look.

She is a tiger-like Rajamala and is small and lithe, causing her long tail to seem a bit out of place, being the same length as the rest of her body. You can clearly see the rigors of combat have taken their toll, with a toned, hardened body and a worn face showing the first signs of old age. She is covered in soft, white fur, accented by dark bands, the most clearly defined being a band of black fur around her neck. A few streaks of grey run through her tail, which fades into a soft, rusty color near the tip. Her eyes are a pale silver, and seem to reflect the color of her surroundings. Her hair matches her feline eyes in colour, with additional streaks of darker grey, and is pulled back in a tight braid that reaches down to the middle of her back. Barely visible in their retracted state, the tips of her claws glint dangerously, apparently dyed bright silver. You can see several runes scattered over her body, stained in her fur with blue ink. She grips a massive halberd tightly in her hands, the weapon looking to be at least two feet taller than she is.

Like I said, feel to pick and choose some (or none) of my suggestions!