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  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    Zbaco said:
    First time in this particular part of the forums, saw this thread, and figured what the heck. Have at it!

    He is a tiger-like rajamala and is a tall, powerful looking person, standing at nearly seven feet in height [1]. His thick fur is a dark reddish-orange, noticably darker than the average Rajamala's fur, and striped with long black stripes. Although most of the stripes are edged with silver, he still sports a full coat of fur [2]. The stripes stop near his belly, which is covered in soft white fur, and his long tail curls up behind him, its white tip gently twitching back and forth [3]. Bright blue eyes look out from a furry face, twinkling mischeviously at you [4]. There is a hint of a smile on his face, suggesting that a wry sense of humor lurks not too far beneath the surface. Although he is totally covered by fur, one can see the hints of old battlescars beneath the fur [5], suggesting that he has seen his share of combat and is more the wiser for it.

    1. I'm all about assertiveness, especially when it comes to descriptions. Personally, I'd suggest "He is a tiger-like Rajamala and is a tall, powerful being, standing nearly seven feet in height."

    2. Why do you use although here? Unless it is actual silver, like the metal, then the use doesn't make sense. Also, no reason to say he has a full coat of fur, especially if you later go on to say it again - needless repitition, in ny opinion. I'd replace the sentence with more detail on the stripes - horizontal or vertical? Straight or wavey? Elaborate on the silver, too.

    3. As these are two different things, I'd break them into two sentences -  one for the tail, one for the fur on his belly. You don't need to have complex sentences every time, either, as that's a common theme you've got going. IE - The stripes terminate near his abdomen, which is covered in soft, white fur. Curling up behind him, his tail gently twitches to and fro. - Or something.

    4. While I don't have a problem with the use of 'you', I'd replace part of the sentence with some on his snout. To me, he looks a lot like Hermione Granger from HP after she took the Pollyjuice Potion and became a cat-lady. 

    5. I'd just get rid if this because of how many times you already used the word fur, but that's a personal thing.
  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    Also @Zbaco because I forget sometimes people don't check. 

    Also, would love some feedback on mine. I think it's a pretty good description, but I miss stuff. T_T

    He is a mhun, on the taller end of the spectrum at about six and a half feet in height. The young Mhaldorian wields a frame built of sleek, trained athletic muscle, broad of shoulder yet slight of waist to construct a slim and lean physique. His light brown skin is reminiscent of caramel, lightly shining with the vitality of youth. Often lax, almond-shaped eyes lazily wander about their surroundings, with the man's irises being a hazy mix of light hazel and olive. His slim nose features slightly broad nostrils, yet only goes on to complement his slightly thick, shapely lips, chiseled jawline, and equally built chin. A somewhat heavy smattering of dark freckles pepper the bridge of his nose and cheeks. Light brown in color, his hair is a mess of thick, bouncing curls, long enough to cover his forehead and the majority of his ears, yet not so long as to impede upon his line of sight.
  • AzramAzram Member Posts: 1
    I'd love to get some feedback on my description if anyone has the time. I'm trying to think of some way to be more descriptive of the body, but here is what I have so far.

    He is a lizard-like Xoran. Standing roughly seven feet tall, a fine lattice of cobalt scales covers his muscular form, glistening whenever the light shines on them. His angular head features a relatively short snout set below a pair of gleaming, yellow eyes. Despite its compact nature, a wall of razor-sharp teeth remains clearly visible whenever he opens his mouth. Thick, corded muscles comprise much of his stocky torso before giving way to lithe, muscular limbs that terminate in a set of sharp claws. Behind him, a long, thick tail provides balance to his large frame.
    KyrraVirgoMelaina
  • RemiliaRemilia Member Posts: 63 ✭✭✭ - Distinguished
    I recently revamped my description. Mostly threw out a lot of unnecessary big words and verbiage.

    She is a human. Remilia stands among the tallest of her peers, giving her a decidedly statuesque appearance. Though she has been gifted with a generous milky-hued physique, the keen lines of her countenance hint at a calculating demeanour. Her luxuriant hair is bound in a loose ponytail at the nape of her neck, tumbling down her back in a voluminous flaxen mess. The front of it has been entirely swept to the right side of her face, partially shadowing her eye. A modest helping of smoky liner accents her sharply angled cerulean eyes and fairly thick eyebrows, and her lips are faintly tinted peach. An escarbuncle has been branded upon the bottom of her forearm, the indelible scar bright pink against her skin.
    Virgo
  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    Azram said:
    I'd love to get some feedback on my description if anyone has the time. I'm trying to think of some way to be more descriptive of the body, but here is what I have so far.

    He is a lizard-like Xoran. Standing roughly seven feet tall, a fine lattice [1] of cobalt scales covers his muscular form, glistening whenever the light shines on them. His angular head features a relatively short snout set below a pair of gleaming, yellow eyes. Despite its compact nature, a wall of razor-sharp teeth remains clearly visible whenever he opens his mouth. Thick, corded muscles comprise much of his stocky torso before giving way to lithe, muscular limbs that terminate in a set of sharp claws [2]. Behind him, a long, thick tail provides balance to his large frame.
    @Azram
     
    1. "a structure consisting of strips of wood or metal crossed and fastened together with square or diamond-shaped spaces left between" - I definitely get what you're trying to say here, and probably everyone else, but obviously as per definition, you've got a scaled body that is missing every other scale. Unfortunately, I don't know of a better word, but just wanted to point it out just in case.

    2. Again, I definitely know what you're trying to convey, but the wording is a little off, IF we wanted to get technical. This is just a 50/50 thing, you can add in a little bit on his fingers (long? nimble? thick? slim?), or you can leave it as it is. TBH, both are totally fine, just pointing out.

    Really good description, period. You don't have anything fancy such as stances, movement, or whathaveyoupurpleprose that others like to use, but I can still sense that this guy has some real power backing his bite. 

    @Remilia I'd comment on yours, but your description is considerably better than mine and I don't see anything you missed except you deleted the bit about that HOURGLASS FIGURE, ooo lala.
  • ZenithZenith Member Posts: 7
    @Remilia

    I'm pretty new to all this so maybe it's okay to not say it (or maybe I missed it), but what color is her hair? Is that something you think you should include? 
  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    @Zenith

    "Flax or Flaxen is a pale yellowish-gray color named after flax seeds." She's a blonde.
    NazihkZenith
  • NazihkNazihk Member Posts: 432 ✭✭✭✭ - Eminent
    Zenith said:
    @Remilia

    I'm pretty new to all this so maybe it's okay to not say it (or maybe I missed it), but what color is her hair? Is that something you think you should include? 
    "Her luxuriant hair is bound in a loose ponytail at the nape of her neck, tumbling down her back in a voluminous flaxen mess."

    "Flaxen" is sort of a golden blonde sort of color, the color of flax seeds.
    VirgoZenith
  • BeowinBeowin Member Posts: 8
    Sure why not:

    She is a graceful tsol'aa. Quite short for one of her race, Beowin stands at only four 
    foot two. What she lacks in height she makes up for in form. Sea grey eyes cast a stern 
    countenance, though if one looks long enough, fire sparks in their depths. Dark Auburn 
    hair tumbles in thick wavey layers just above her shoulders, framing delicate facial 
    features usual for her race. Along the right side of her face and down the corresponding 
    side of her body are deep set scars, both burnt and cut, of all different sizes and shapes.
    She is immensely toned, soft enough by look, but in movement muscle is keenly evident. Her 
    feminine features are even, balanced, and not at all vuluptuous. In certain clothing a 
    name can be seen in elegant tiny script, inked blue on her upper ribs, left side.
  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    edited April 8
    Beowin said:
    Sure why not:

    She is a graceful tsol'aa. Quite short for one of her race, Beowin stands at only four foot two [1]. What she lacks in height she makes up for in form. Sea grey eyes cast a stern countenance, though if one looks long enough, fire sparks in their depths. Dark auburn hair tumbles in thick wavey layers [2] just above her shoulders, framing delicate facial features usual for her race [3]. Along the right side of her face and down the corresponding side of her body are deep set scars, both burned and cut, of all different sizes and shapes. She is immensely toned, soft enough by look, but in movement muscle is keenly evident [4]. Her feminine features are even, balanced, and not at all voluptuous. In certain clothing a name can be seen in elegant tiny script, inked blue on her upper ribs, left side. [5]
    I like how it is, just a few things.

    1. This is all personal, but I'd suggest making her taller. Sure, she can be short, I've seen a lot if short adults (5'2, 5'3, etc), but 4'2..... Eh. I'm sure everyone would be fine with it, but I personally find it a little distasteful. 

    2. Just a comma here. "... thickwavey layers..."

    3. I'd delete this, as you mentioned her race having an effect on her features already. But that one is just 50/50, whichever you want is entirely fine. 

    4. Wording is a little odd here. Maybe it's the "in movement muscle is keenly evident". Perhaps you should change it to "She is immensely toned and soft enough by look." We know she's fit, decently muscled, trim, athletic all from the word "toned", but the "in movement muscle is keenly evident" makes me think "She raises her hand and BAM, bulging bicep and her forearm is veiny" which I don't think you're going for. If you wanted to keep it, maybe "her lean muscles flex with every movement" or something.

    5. I think you should remove the "in certain clothing" and have your character rock a crop top 24/7. 

    @Beowin
    Beowin
  • BeowinBeowin Member Posts: 8
    Virgo said:
    Beowin said:
    Sure why not:

    She is a graceful tsol'aa. Quite short for one of her race, Beowin stands at only four foot two [1]. What she lacks in height she makes up for in form. Sea grey eyes cast a stern countenance, though if one looks long enough, fire sparks in their depths. Dark auburn hair tumbles in thick wavey layers [2] just above her shoulders, framing delicate facial features usual for her race [3]. Along the right side of her face and down the corresponding side of her body are deep set scars, both burned and cut, of all different sizes and shapes. She is immensely toned, soft enough by look, but in movement muscle is keenly evident [4]. Her feminine features are even, balanced, and not at all voluptuous. In certain clothing a name can be seen in elegant tiny script, inked blue on her upper ribs, left side. [5]
    I like how it is, just a few things.

    1. This is all personal, but I'd suggest making her taller. Sure, she can be short, I've seen a lot if short adults (5'2, 5'3, etc), but 4'2..... Eh. I'm sure everyone would be fine with it, but I personally find it a little distasteful. 

    2. Just a comma here. "... thickwavey layers..."

    3. I'd delete this, as you mentioned her race having an effect on her features already. But that one is just 50/50, whichever you want is entirely fine. 

    4. Wording is a little odd here. Maybe it's the "in movement muscle is keenly evident". Perhaps you should change it to "She is immensely toned and soft enough by look." We know she's fit, decently muscled, trim, athletic all from the word "toned", but the "in movement muscle is keenly evident" makes me think "She raises her hand and BAM, bulging bicep and her forearm is veiny" which I don't think you're going for. If you wanted to keep it, maybe "her lean muscles flex with every movement" or something.

    5. I think you should remove the "in certain clothing" and have your character rock a crop top 24/7. 

    @Beowin
    She's half dwarf ;)
  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    Beowin said:
    Virgo said:
    Beowin said:
    Sure why not:

    She is a graceful tsol'aa. Quite short for one of her race, Beowin stands at only four foot two [1]. What she lacks in height she makes up for in form. Sea grey eyes cast a stern countenance, though if one looks long enough, fire sparks in their depths. Dark auburn hair tumbles in thick wavey layers [2] just above her shoulders, framing delicate facial features usual for her race [3]. Along the right side of her face and down the corresponding side of her body are deep set scars, both burned and cut, of all different sizes and shapes. She is immensely toned, soft enough by look, but in movement muscle is keenly evident [4]. Her feminine features are even, balanced, and not at all voluptuous. In certain clothing a name can be seen in elegant tiny script, inked blue on her upper ribs, left side. [5]
    I like how it is, just a few things.

    1. This is all personal, but I'd suggest making her taller. Sure, she can be short, I've seen a lot if short adults (5'2, 5'3, etc), but 4'2..... Eh. I'm sure everyone would be fine with it, but I personally find it a little distasteful. 

    2. Just a comma here. "... thickwavey layers..."

    3. I'd delete this, as you mentioned her race having an effect on her features already. But that one is just 50/50, whichever you want is entirely fine. 

    4. Wording is a little odd here. Maybe it's the "in movement muscle is keenly evident". Perhaps you should change it to "She is immensely toned and soft enough by look." We know she's fit, decently muscled, trim, athletic all from the word "toned", but the "in movement muscle is keenly evident" makes me think "She raises her hand and BAM, bulging bicep and her forearm is veiny" which I don't think you're going for. If you wanted to keep it, maybe "her lean muscles flex with every movement" or something.

    5. I think you should remove the "in certain clothing" and have your character rock a crop top 24/7. 

    @Beowin
    She's half dwarf ;)
    Okay, that actually does make her size way more understandable. Sorry 'bout that, lol. Erases that little bit.
  • AntoniusAntonius Member Posts: 3,842 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    I could be mistaken, but I'm pretty sure the official stance is that half anythings are impossible. You are only ever one race, you can't be half Tsol'aa and half Dwarf.
    Melaina
  • KryptonKrypton shi-KhurenaMember Posts: 1,707 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    Pish posh, anything is possible if you set your mind to it!

    Trey said:

    He is a frog-like grook but is actually a Tsol'aa.  He is of a deep, ebony 
    complexion; skin of liquid shadow that consumes the light around him and warps 
    the air in a disturbing dissonance. His eyes, scarlet crimson orbs flecked with 
    vivid motes of effervescent mauve, shift from one direction to the next as they 
    survey his surroundings with a cruel disdain. His body is lithe, graceful and 
    tall, exuding a powerful, confident elegance with every calculated and 
    purposeful movement. Taut muscles press against his shadow-suffused skin, 
    lending a subtle strength to his limber physique. Smooth, soft lips of pale 
    sable easily twist into a sardonic smirk belonging to a being of an arrogant 
    disposition. Large, voluminous blue-black wings flare out from behind him. The 
    wings, slender and exquisite, are composed of strikingly vibrant feathers that 
    gleam with a dull effulgence. The tips end in an almost imperceptible splash of 
    silver-violet, though it is indiscernable as to whether it is natural or 
    something else entirely. From the crown of his head flows exotic, luxurious 
    silver tresses that fall just past his shoulders, infused with strands of deep 
    violet that weave fluidly down to the tips. A thick strand had been braided 
    neatly across the tip of his forehead while a shimmering curtain of 
    silver-violet frames his angular face to emphasize the slender, handsome bone 
    structure. A dark, narrow goatee over silvery hair traces the outline of his 
    face and gives a refined, sinister ambiance of nobility to his features. His 
    right arm extends into svelte fingertips that end in cruelly sharpened nails 
    tipped in a dark mauve shade, flexing nimbly as if in restless dispose. On the 
    other arm rests naught but a stump, his hand severed cleanly from the wrist. 




    Get the fuck out, man.

    (Mhaldor): Herenicus says, "Apologies, I am in-and-out of hold with Verizon wireless customer service."
    Virgo
  • KresslackKresslack Florida, United StatesMember Posts: 5,629 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    After meaning to do it for a while now, I finally updated my description and went with a look that showed signs of actual aging and being an adventurer. I don't want my character to be forever young. Eventually, I'm going to be that old sailor passed out at a table in the tavern in a mixture of equal parts spilled rum and drool, waiting for someone to wake me up, buy me a drink, and ask to hear a story. So this is what I ended up with:

    He is a mhun standing around six feet and seven inches, burly and barrel-chested, with a near-permanent scowl as he chews languidly on the stump of a cigar. Coarse, sun-faded black hair streaked heavily with grey hangs falls past his shoulders, loosely plaited and bound with rings of ivory carved to resemble an ouroboros. Hazel eyes of subtly shifting greys and greens peer out from under furrowed brow, narrowed to a hawkish visage as he carefully surveys his surroundings. Draping down to his chest is a long, full beard, similarly streaked with grey and braided loosely at the sides and down the middle. Small beads of wood and carved bone tie off the ends of each braid, clicking together softly from time to time. Sun burnished skin, tough as leather, is adorned with an odd skein of scars and faded tattoos of nautical and obscure symbols. Signs of the passing years and a life spent at sea have left their tell-tale signs in the wrinkles that have set into the skin, the grey in his hair, and the development of a firm pot belly. Deceptive as these traits are, there is still a glint of purpose within his eyes, and the noticeable signs of muscle that yet cord his frame. On the inside of his right forearm can be seen the blanche brand of a crude escarbuncle within a border of thorns, and further down on his wrist is a black inked stain in the shape of the letter 'P'.



    VirgoKenwayZenith
  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    Your description is awesome. I really like it.
  • KenwayKenway San FranciscoMember Posts: 1,097 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    Not really comfortable with my writing ability and worried this might sound weird cause it's a thrice(maybe more) modified version of my very first description. Have at it please!

    He is a human. Standing at six feet tall he is well built, with strong, broad shoulders and arms that terminate in calloused hands, criss-crossed with small scars. His hair is dirty blond, cropped close and clean about the temple whilst atop his head it grows free in untamed tangles. His distant eyes are a piercing blue, flecked with gold, small wrinkles sit in their corners, his cheeks worn and scarred by battle and the elements. His beard is short and trim, broken on the left side by a thin but jagged scar running from chin to cheekbone. A small slice has been taken out of his right ear, and the subtle arch of his right eyebrow is broken by the light tissue of an old cut, evidence of some long ago spar gone awry. On closer inspection, his left extremities are almost entirely pale and mutilated scar tissue, their flesh once charred by some fearsome flame.

    - Limb Counter - Fracture Relapsing -
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  • KenwayKenway San FranciscoMember Posts: 1,097 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    Kresslack said:
    After meaning to do it for a while now, I finally updated my description and went with a look that showed signs of actual aging and being an adventurer. I don't want my character to be forever young. Eventually, I'm going to be that old sailor passed out at a table in the tavern in a mixture of equal parts spilled rum and drool, waiting for someone to wake me up, buy me a drink, and ask to hear a story. So this is what I ended up with:

    He is a mhun standing around six feet and seven inches, burly and barrel-chested, with a near-permanent scowl as he chews languidly on the stump of a cigar. Coarse, sun-faded black hair streaked heavily with grey [hangs falls] past his shoulders, loosely plaited and bound with rings of ivory carved to resemble an ouroboros. Hazel eyes of subtly shifting greys and greens peer out from under furrowed brow, narrowed to a hawkish visage as he carefully surveys his surroundings. Draping down to his chest is a long, full beard, similarly streaked with grey and braided loosely at the sides and down the middle. Small beads of wood and carved bone tie off the ends of each braid, clicking together softly from time to time. Sun burnished skin, tough as leather, is adorned with an odd skein of scars and faded tattoos of nautical and obscure symbols. [] The passing years and a life spent at sea have left their tell-tale signs in the wrinkles that have set into the skin, the grey in his hair, and the development of a firm pot belly. Deceptive as these traits are, there is still a glint of purpose within his eyes, and the noticeable signs of muscle that yet cord his frame. On the inside of his right forearm can be seen the blanche brand of a crude escarbuncle within a border of thorns, and further down on his wrist is a black inked stain in the shape of the letter 'P'.

    Those are the only two things I see in there, other wise it looks awesome!

    - Limb Counter - Fracture Relapsing -
    "Honestly, I just love that it counts limbs." - Mizik Corten
  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    Kresslack said:
    After meaning to do it for a while now, I finally updated my description and went with a look that showed signs of actual aging and being an adventurer. I don't want my character to be forever young. Eventually, I'm going to be that old sailor passed out at a table in the tavern in a mixture of equal parts spilled rum and drool, waiting for someone to wake me up, buy me a drink, and ask to hear a story. So this is what I ended up with:

    He is a mhun standing around six feet and seven inches, burly and barrel-chested, with a near-permanent scowl as he chews languidly on the stump of a cigar. Coarse, sun-faded black hair streaked heavily with grey hangs falls past his shoulders [1], loosely plaited and bound with rings of ivory carved to resemble an ouroboros. Hazel eyes of subtly shifting greys and greens peer out from under furrowed brow [2], narrowed to a hawkish visage as he carefully surveys his surroundings [3]. Draping down to his chest is a long, full beard, similarly streaked with grey and braided loosely at the sides and down the middle. Small beads of wood and carved bone tie off the ends of each braid, clicking together softly from time to time. Sun burnished skin, tough as leather, is adorned with an odd skein of scars and faded tattoos of nautical and obscure symbols. Signs of the passing years and a life spent at sea have left their tell-tale signs in the wrinkles that have set into the skin, the grey in his hair, and the development of a firm pot belly. Deceptive as these traits are, there is still a glint of purpose within his eyes, and the noticeable signs of muscle that yet cord his frame. On the inside of his right forearm can be seen the blanche brand of a crude escarbuncle within a border of thorns, and further down on his wrist is a black inked stain in the shape of the letter 'P'.

    1. Hangs OR falls, they're both equally good.

    2. As obvious as to what the meaning behind this is, I still think you should add 'a', because how do we know you don't have some forehead accessory called Furrowed Brow? Or you entire body is out of wack and your eyes are under your Blademaster word?

    3. Hawkish visage, for humanoids, implies the slightly long, hooked nose, and an actually narrow-type face shape. See the following picture of an actor: 
    This guy (I forget his name) has a "hawkish face", which is mainly centered around his nose. If you're meaning to say that's how his nose loomslooks, your use of narrow is incorrect. If you mean to say he squints and peers around like a hawk, your use of hawkish visage is incorrect. Unfortunately, I'm not fully sure how to help you write that, if you wanted to change it. I'm not that good, lol. @Kresslack

    Now, my updated description.

    He is a winged atavian, an acrobatically built young man who stands at an inch or three above six feet. His light-brown skin is reminiscent of caramel, lightly shining with the vitality of youthful energy. Slightly upturned and heavily lidded, his hazel eyes oft lazily wander the vicinity, and his thick eyebrows are nearly perpetually furrowed in some incomprehensible emotion. His handsome visage is crafted of sharp angles and lines, the Mhaldorian's chiseled jawline tapering to a slightly rounded chin, the entire right half of his face wholly hidden behind a mask of liquid obsidian. Peppered across his slim nose and high cheekbones are dark freckles, virtually ebony in hue. Lightly gleaming with a light brown lustre, Virgo's mess of thick, lucious hazelnut curls brush his forehead, only long enough to cover the tips of his slightly pointed, elongated ears. Imposing wings of platinum feathers tower more than two heads above his own, strength and power evident in each flutter and twitch.


  • KryptonKrypton shi-KhurenaMember Posts: 1,707 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    Hawkish can also just mean "aggressive" or "threatening."
    (Mhaldor): Herenicus says, "Apologies, I am in-and-out of hold with Verizon wireless customer service."
  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    edited April 10
    Krypton said:
    Hawkish can also just mean "aggressive" or "threatening."
    That I didn't know.

    If that's the case, you're all fine, Kresslack. Sorry! D:
  • AntoniusAntonius Member Posts: 3,842 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    Six feet seven inches is a very specific height to "stand around". Either "stands around six and a half feet," or "stands a little over six and a half feet," or just "stands six feet seven inches".
  • TreyTrey Member Posts: 4,231 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    Virgo said:
     
    This guy (I forget his name) has a "hawkish face"
    Adrien Brody

    VirgoKyrra
  • VirgoVirgo Member Posts: 62 ✭✭ - Stalwart
    Trey said:
    Virgo said:
     
    This guy (I forget his name) has a "hawkish face"
    Adrien Brody
    Thanks!
    Valaria
  • MinifieMinifie Member Posts: 886 ✭✭✭✭✭ - Grand Achaean
    Wow his nose has its own scene queues O.O
  • NazihkNazihk Member Posts: 432 ✭✭✭✭ - Eminent
    Krypton said:
    Hawkish can also just mean "aggressive" or "threatening."
    Hawkish as a policy position is aggressive/threatening. Hawkish visage, on the other hand, is always going to be "giant fucking nose". 
  • KryptonKrypton shi-KhurenaMember Posts: 1,707 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    The incorporation of the biggest opposition party into this smorgasbord coalition however, puts a moderate expression on a previously hawkish visage.
    Implying a "hawkish visage" to mean "an expression that is not moderate".
    (Mhaldor): Herenicus says, "Apologies, I am in-and-out of hold with Verizon wireless customer service."
  • NazihkNazihk Member Posts: 432 ✭✭✭✭ - Eminent
    That's talking about political appearances, not the literal physical description of a person. If you use the phrase 'hawkish visage' to describe the literal physical appearance of a person, a significant amount of people are going to go with the giant nose.

    If your character doesn't have a giant nose, you might want to avoid using that phrase because it will be misinterpreted.
  • KresslackKresslack Florida, United StatesMember Posts: 5,629 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    Ok, so currently can only access the forums from home where I'm already logged in. In any case...

    What I was going for was kind of a narrowed eyes type of look of someone who has spent most of their time out in the sun. It never occurred to me that 'hawkish' was an adjective in reference to the beak, so that's a bit h-awkward.

    If you've ever seen Tombstone with Kurt Russel, this is what I was wanting:



    Any suggestions?


  • KenwayKenway San FranciscoMember Posts: 1,097 @@ - Legendary Achaean
    Kresslack said:
    Ok, so currently can only access the forums from home where I'm already logged in. In any case...

    What I was going for was kind of a narrowed eyes type of look of someone who has spent most of their time out in the sun. It never occurred to me that 'hawkish' was an adjective in reference to the beak, so that's a bit h-awkward.

    If you've ever seen Tombstone with Kurt Russel, this is what I was wanting:



    Any suggestions?
    Holy shit that's a fantastic film. My dear, you've set your gaze upon the quintessential frontier type. Note the lean silhouette... eyes closed by the sun, though sharp as a hawk. He's got the look of both predator and prey.

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    "Honestly, I just love that it counts limbs." - Mizik Corten
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